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I'd Like You To Know... by ~inspirational-dreams:iconinspirational-dreams:

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Thanks to :iconxjankax: for allowing this deviation to be a success. I encourage you to check out the original picture 'alone in my zone' [link] & to provide her with your comments of the beauty of the picture.

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Critique is welcome :blowkiss:

I realize we met on the terms of lust
but the moment I saw you
my heart did thrust.
Sitting naked with each other
we couldn’t keep our hands
off one another.
Just so you know
my eyes were on you
looking for clues.
Destined to whatever
may come next
I’d like you to know
I'm wishing for all the best.

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~naturesounds Jan 24, 2008, 12:30:11 PM
aww,i hear that all da time ! :thumbsup:

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=KyubiNoKitsune13 Jan 24, 2008, 4:00:22 PM
Very cute and heartwarming. =3
It reminds me a little love letter.
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~wizfrikiman Jan 25, 2008, 10:05:14 AM
You know how to break my heart.

Great job.

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!Zombie-Vomit Feb 7, 2008, 9:37:54 AM
It's sad how some relationships start out with sex, before true feelings are even shown... :( I really like this poem and the image to go with it. Nice job.

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=VisualPoetress Feb 7, 2008, 9:16:20 PM
I know that feeling all so well starting out with lust first. Beautiful work :)

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!pyanopsion Mar 7, 2008, 3:39:47 AM
the image is great. but the poem... not so great, no offence.

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'cause you're everything i've ever dreamed of having... :heart:
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~inspirational-dreams Mar 7, 2008, 4:45:56 AM
:giggle: that's cool

Thanks for the purity of the comment
:ahoy:

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mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind."
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*Lamarcus Mar 4, 2009, 4:23:51 PM
It's cute, but I feel like the rhyme scheme forces you to twist some lines in unnatural ways. Like "but the moment I saw you / my heart did thrust" sounds very contrived. Also the lines "Destined to whatever / may come next" makes no sense—destiny by definition is what comes next.

I like the concept, though!

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