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Illumination by ~inspirational-dreams:iconinspirational-dreams:

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His skin brushes up against hers
and goose bumps arise.
He caress' her face and
she feels the urge.
She bites her lip, eager for more
but ever more hesitant than ever before.
So innocent and cute
his face illuminates the darkness
so she can see.
Fearful of bruises and empowering force,
her hands are shaking and
tears overflow the
lashes that surround her eyes.
She feels fine inside
but her body is reacting
and she's losing control.
His handsome blue eyes absorb the scene
and like a whisper in the breeze
his arms surround her
smothering the disease.
He holds her tight and
encourages her to pursue the fight
even if it means none for him tonight.
©2008-2009 ~inspirational-dreams
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Written back in early April....

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=naturesounds:iconnaturesounds: May 9, 2008, 12:10:02 PM
hahahaha , that was a good one :)

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*VixRayne:iconVixRayne: May 9, 2008, 4:43:07 PM
and like a whisper in the breeze
his arms surround her


I love these 2 lines well done.

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Mood: Wow! *mercymanic:iconmercymanic: May 9, 2008, 5:29:12 PM
Okay this is getting weird. Check out BURN in my gallery. Great write.

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"The desire of power in excess caused angels to fall. The desire of knowledge in excess caused man to fall. But in love and charity there is no excess, neither can man or angels come into danger by it."
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~inspirational-dreams:iconinspirational-dreams: May 9, 2008, 7:29:38 PM
perhaps could you send me the link .... I've got dial-up internet and I don't feel like waiting another 20 minutes for a page to load.. lol

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*mercymanic:iconmercymanic: May 10, 2008, 6:02:40 AM
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"The desire of power in excess caused angels to fall. The desire of knowledge in excess caused man to fall. But in love and charity there is no excess, neither can man or angels come into danger by it."
- Francis Bacon
~Singinchic7:iconSinginchic7: May 10, 2008, 12:20:04 PM
Beautiful Job!! :clap: :clap:

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~Chima:iconChima: May 14, 2008, 5:34:53 AM
I really like this one, it's something I've gone through myself v.v having a guy that understands is an awesome thing.

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We feel the emptiness so we can find a way to fill it.
~janine-strength:iconjanine-strength: Jun 2, 2008, 6:52:34 AM
Wow, I really like it.
Towards the end, the pace of my reading got faster. It was like building up to something.
There could be a part 2 for this. Hehe
Good job :)

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